Yumnang8

Hi,  can you check out my new story?  I really need some feedback since i stopped writing for a while...  Thank you! 
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/265125967?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=itmustbeserendipity&wp_originator=UOzj8Uio6k6qDA%2BqMrNW8pqk3vkvnqQ%2FOLekpXrLLNXoGnN8zgI7jUiBVeFaxz9d7Du%2FqYiPDBL3KthlJ9S5kbZUv9vRTzpgIEziB8AZTXJwhCzAlwyilLxj7mgvPNCn