Hey Gauru
I have checked your story and I really liked it❤️
It’s such a good concept…the story has lot of potential…
Although there are a few things I’d like to suggest… first one is not using emojis in the book….emojis are such a huge turn off specially when they are added in between…
Second thing is that….you have to make the paragraphs shorter…. Longer paragraphs are not very pleasant to read, so add some breaks between them…and also use proper writing style…like somewhere the lines are underlined and somewhere they are written in bold when it was not necessary so do edit them.
And all the best for your book, it’s okay to make grammatical errors but don’t use ai to correct them. You will face a lot of problems in future regarding that….i wish you more success❤️