EwanKidner
Hey, I was wondering if you were going to update the story, it’s okay if not.
Zephyr715
@EwanKidner yes I am, I'm getting closer to the final chapters but I just need to make it as good as u can
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EwanKidner
It’s been a while since I’ve come to your story. How are you doing? Are You doing alright?
EwanKidner
Hey, I have an idea, what if Jake waits for Pearl and Marina to leave, and he pulls out a knife he was hiding down his sleeve to get out the ropes, then escape.
EwanKidner
Looking forward to the 25th?, many are.
EwanKidner
@Zephyr715, yeah, Santa’s covered in red for a reason, there’s a reason they call him Santa CLAWS.
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EwanKidner
@Zephyr715, thanks for telling me, I’ve been setting up SAM sites for Santa, he can’t be trusted.
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EwanKidner
Hey, I thought of some interactions between Franky and deep cut, want to hear them?
EwanKidner
Hey, quick thing, the new chapter seems to indicate that it has been a while since Frye fought in alterna, but I think that you should indicate that it hasn’t been, as each deep cut boss fight happens relatively shortly after the previous, and there hasn’t been any mention of shiver or big man’s boss fight in the last few chapters. Just thought I would mention it.
EwanKidner
Hey, nice new chapter. I thought of something you could add to it, Shiver could ask why these humans didn’t survive, and Franky could mention that it is likely that the machines malfunctioned and froze the bodies too much, making them brittle. How are you doing by the way?
EwanKidner
Hey, look at your story’s splatoon3 ranking, you’re number 1, congratulations.
EwanKidner
@Zephyr715, it’s been 9 days and you’re still there, how lucky. You doing good by the way?
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EwanKidner
Hey, the new chapter is pretty good. Also I was wondering if you saw the feedback from sep 12 that I gave you?
EwanKidner
@Zephyr715, cool, I’ll tell you some more ideas some other time. Have fun. And have a nice day.
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Zephyr715
@EwanKidner yeah, very interesting, I'll have to change a couple stuff of course, but I think this could work
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EwanKidner
Franky explained, ‘anyway, enough about that, how about I show you some massaging techniques’ he suggested, ‘okay, let’s do it’ said Frye. I think this would be a good interaction to add.
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