Hi there, I hope you enjoyed my story I wrote, I put a lot of effort into it. I am new to writing stories like this though, so I'm not very good at it. If you have something you want to say about my story, positive or negative, I'd love to hear it. I want to know what I'm doing right and what I'm doing completely wrong; because I feel that I have very good stories I just need to put it into words correctly. So please, I would love criticism. Have a nice day!