@dinkyiz hey! I'm so sorry for the late reply I wasn't online for a few months. And I've just read your book, its good I like the idea and you write really well. I'm not expert at writing or anything but I can give you a few tips. I've noticed you've written so many works that are unfinished, so I'd say concentrate at one work at a time and try and complete them as soon as possible ( I wrote half of my book and didn't update it for a few months and lost most of my readers :/).
Read and follow other people's stories trust me you get to learn a lot. Message them, make friends, tag them. Comment on their stories, and make sure your comment is something meaningful like appreciating a character or a tiny detail in the story rather than just a plain compliment, this intrigues the person and they'll definitely check your profile out (hopefully). When you get a positive feedback from a person and when someone follows you always follow back and check their followers and see their works and you can expect the same feedback from them. Don't be shy when asking someone to read your story, just read at least one chapter from their story and vote if you liked it, they'll be happy to return the favour. Above all keep updating your book regularly, don't go beyond 30 chapters, just include as much storyline in each chapter as possible, if not the unnecessary details will make them long and boring. So these are a few tips I've come up with that might help you. Good luck ..