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Just caught up with some of your recent lines, Jane. Still blown away by how you capture those 'quiet victories.' Can't wait for your next update! I just added your stories to my reading list.

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 “Congratulations on this wonderful achievement. May you grow even more!”✨

Congratulations 

Out of the top 10 books in drama romance, two are mine.
          
          Should I be concerned about my mental health?
          …yeah, no. Let’s not open that door.
          
          Thank you. Seriously.
          
          I see you. All of you.
          
          Eight months here — and somehow this turned into something real. Not just numbers. People.
          
          Some of you… stayed. And that means more than I know how to say.
          
          I’m not good at pretty gratitude.
          
          So I’ll say it like this:
          
          Talent without people who believe in it
          is just noise.
          
          And you didn’t let me stay noise.

Book Review: “Obsession”
          I finished the book. Here’s my review.
          The book hooks you right from the start. Yes, the POV sometimes jumps without warning, which can be a bit disorienting, but in the end, it’s worth it.
          
          When you begin reading, it feels like a classic toxic drama: “She trusted him, and he’s the cruel sex genius who will break her and turn her life into hell.” She seems naive and damaged, while he appears to be the perfect seducer. You expect the usual plot: she falls in love, submits, there are three chapters of hot sex, and then the heroine’s self-destruction against the backdrop of his indifference. That’s exactly what I anticipated from a book titled “Obsession,” especially after the early scenes with the handsome, composed man and the divorced woman.
          But the story goes in a completely different direction. The plot constantly surprises, frustrates, angers, and pulls you in, forcing you to keep reading.

          
          Almost until the very end, I was ready to bet that the finale would be painful and brutal. Instead, it turned out to be almost a fairy tale with a happy ending. It might be a little too optimistic, but in today’s world of endless shit, it feels refreshingly new. I love good endings.
          
          M grows noticeably, and his development feels convincing. By the end, he becomes a man truly worthy of the love of the woman who “created” him — confident, calm, having learned to protect instead of control. He’s capable of trusting and yielding where it truly matters to her. He’s mature. M is genuinely great.
          The only issue is that in the middle of the book, his transformation happens quite abruptly, almost like a jump. It feels as if the hardest part — the actual breaking and rebuilding of himself — was cut out between two chapters. There’s an explanation for why he decides to change, but the internal struggle remains off-page. It’s acceptable, but it creates the sense that months pass between certain chapters. It might be worth emphasizing the passage of time more clearly or adding small moments that show his growth: how he consciously releases control over things that don’t need controlling. For example, letting her decide when she’s had enough wine, or calmly accepting her wearing a shorter skirt than he’s comfortable with. Those little things where he simply stays by her side instead of trying to maintain control.

She doesn’t grow much — and she doesn’t really need to. She’s already perfect. Yes, she’s broken, but not like a shattered ceramic mug. She’s like a broken crystal vase — elegant, sensual, and capable of giving immense love once the pieces are put back together correctly.
          From a mile away, you can feel her deep desire to let go of control, to trust a man, to submit. Her mind resists: she constantly tells herself she’s strong, she hates being a housewife, she needs space, work, and freedom. She tries very hard to be the ideal modern independent feminist. But ultimately, she’s tired of being “strong and independent.” She just wants to be held, to have someone fix her and her life, and give her the hearth she secretly wants to care for.
          And M gradually teaches her to accept this, destroying her self-stereotypes in the process. First, he learns how to fuck her properly — and this is probably the easiest part for him. She doesn’t want sappy, sentimental sex. She wants to feel desperately wanted. And he knows how to give her that. Half of his mistakes are forgiven simply because he can put her in the right position at the right moment and make her come so hard that her “I’m leaving” turns into “I’ll leave right after I come… and then I’ll leave.” And afterward she lies there thinking, “Where was I planning to go after sex? Never mind, it doesn’t matter.”

          He always had care in him. He’s ready to carry her in his arms; he just doesn’t yet know how to do it in a way she likes. But the desire is there, and it’s obvious. She learns to accept it quite quickly — and it feels very realistic. This is exactly how a woman usually “breaks” for a man when she truly loves him.
          Control scares her at first because he presses too hard, and she’s terrified of losing it. But at one point, I had a feeling that one specific day, somewhere behind a scene, not on pages, there’s an almost simultaneous step forward: one morning he offers to leave the bodyguard at the entrance so he doesn’t scare her colleagues, and that same evening she asks him to tie her up and fuck her exactly the way he wants. His toxic control gradually transforms into healthy dominance, and her fear of losing herself turns into the feeling of being a loved and desired woman of her man.
          Book doesn’t describe it to you. That day. But you can feel - it happened somewhere between the pages. You know it did.

The switch from Dean to Matt felt unnecessary to me. The acid wouldn’t have taken Dean out for long, and plot-wise he could have easily replaced Matt without anything changing. If you’re going to make the change, either make his injury more serious (a stab wound or a gunshot when he turns his back to protect her), or let him recover faster and do everything Matt does. Right now, this replacement feels forced. It’s not critical, but if you’re planning to publish in print, adapt it into a script, or turn it into a webtoon, I’d recommend rethinking this.
          
          The Ex…
          The ex-husband character is very well written and realistic. He’s a normal man who simply couldn’t handle a woman with a deep inner world. He didn’t hear her, didn’t notice, and never knocked on the doors that needed opening. I felt like there were no smashed dishes, scandals, or jealousy — they just lived like roommates. And she slowly suffocated without emotions, without feeling alive. That’s why I think she blames herself so much: “Everything seemed fine, yet I left.” But in reality, everything was not fine. She had been knocking on a closed door and never got through.
          You can’t put all the blame on either of them. They simply became strangers to each other.
          
          This is perhaps one of the first books where a woman has described men’s inner experiences so realistically. Not perfectly, but in many ways you nailed it — whether by accident or intentionally. M, Dean, and the ex all think, act, and feel about 80% like real men. Yes, occasionally a feminine “whim” or “I want” peeks through, but overall it’s very thoughtful and convincing.
          Overall, this book can surprise even a male reader.
          
          So if you want polish - go read Hardy Porter. After dozens of professional editors it’s a perfect easy read. 
          
          If you want raw emotions of broken women and man healing each other - grab a cap of tea, tell everyone in a house to fuck off and start reading “Obsession”.