Okay, while reading ur Brendon Urie x reader, I notice you never (or very occasionally) use commas, and you always write in this kind of “list” form? And they aren’t proper paragraphs.
So instead of writing like:
I wake up.
I check my phone to see if Brendon has texted me.
He has!
It made my day there and then.
^
The style is very choppy and quite uncomfortable to read, as there are so many full stops it feels very tense and dramatic, but really it’s just your boyfriend texting you good morning. It’s quite uncomfortable to read.
You should maybe write like:
I wake up and roll over to check my phone to see if Brendon has texted me, I see that he has, I smile as the message makes my day immediately.
^
This style flows, and doesn’t feel choppy or tense. It’s more comfortable to read-not just because it flows, it’s because it’s an actual paragraph, not a list of what you did today!!
One last thing, lay off that return button until you’re finished with the paragraph!
So instead of:
I wake up. [return]
I check my phone to see if Brendon has texted me. [return]
He has! [return]
It made my day there and then. [return]
^
Go like:
wake up and roll over to check my phone to see if Brendon has texted me, I see that he has, I smile as the message makes my day immediately.
[return, new paragraph]
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I bid you greatness in the future!!
PLUR!!