Hi Patience, I read your book. I think your writing style is pretty good for a first-time-writer. This is a social media platform and people can sometimes write ridiculous hate comments, relying on their anonymity. What I want from you is to never lose your enthusiasm for the things you write. If you don't lose your motivation, I'm sure you'll get to much better places. The subject of the book is not one of the genres I read, I generally like fanfic, but know that I will always support you and your writings! I don't have much time for interlinear comments, but always remember that there is a stranger here supporting you!