Hello, it’s me, HON HON HON, anyway, it’s okay, although some things I would suggest is to make it more detailed, an example would be:
“She looked around, her eyes scanning the surrounding area, her breath ragged and uneven, trying to find her way out of the forest, but she could only see birch trees, their black eyes watching her every move, etc.” like that.
Another thing to add is to fix the alignment of the words, don’t make them centerline because it doesn’t look nice, make them left aligned.
That’s all that I have to say about your fanfic, but all in all, it’s quite good. I hope to see more of it and it’s improvements.
Sincerely, HON HON HON.
