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Hey ' ! Can you check out my story hard fight ? need an opinion :) 
          

Making a new WattPad account ^^/ won't be using this one anymore for personal reasons

I would also like too include that their might be some girl in the story too (cliche stuff) just too put some more feeling into the story itself

Hello, it's Chrissy! Anyways too get too the point; I've been doing a lot of thinking over this, and I figure it might be a actual good idea. I've been watching adventure adventure time for quiet a while now, and I've seen so many fan fictions sand such evolving around the actual t.v series. But, I haven't seen (or read, at least so far) any stories about what was going on in the real world outside of Fins imagination, and yes I am basing this off of the story theory of Fin being in a coma. And what I was thinking is that I could create a story about what was happening before Fin was in a coma, just a crazy idea though; what do you guys think?

I've currently been working on a story for a few months now, and a lot of thought has gone into it.
          
          It won't be the "best story ever" but these few months I've been working have only been put into the first chapter of it, and I've been a little skeptic about posting it.
          
          It's not a fan fiction; but my own creation, with my own characters in them; so I hope when I post it later on this week maybe, that you will give me a chance and maybe read a bit.
          
          I would also love if you would comment what I should change and what I should keep, it would mean a lot of I heard these things from another persons perspective~
          
          Xoxoxo