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far sucks too

what even

seriously

do something productive

this story is hard to follow

your character's names are too similar

your reading list sucks

SOO MUCH IS WRONG WITH YOUR STORY THE ACTONS OF THE CHARACTERS does not fit in the context of the story

Thankyou I have had a ton of expert opinions from experience myself 

As a friend I have to tell you that the story is unoriginal and hard to follow.   you have perfectly captured life as a rich white girl. congratulations