I really enjoyed reading your story bun, but I did noticed a few grammatical errors, sorry for pointing it out it just that I thought mentioning them might help improve your work. And it's not like you're alone I also make a lot of errors, and we are in the learning phase.
I just wanted to say, Keep writing and don't be discouraged, I think every writer go through this, and it's all part of the learning process right?!. Your storytelling is great, and with a bit of polishing, it'll be even better..!! And Thankyou for checking out my first book and even voting for it. Your support means a lot.❤️
All the best bun<33
(My my it's a long ass msg) Sorry!!!