@XAliveButDyingX It's okay, thanks for your feedback! :)
Are you asking me to help you with a particular part of writing? If so, personally message me with more details and I could potentially write a part up in my "Edit like an Editor" book and dedicate it to you.
If not, and you're asking for a critique of your work, just know I only do critiques that are short and quick for me, because I am pretty busy, and starting the new year, will be even more busy!
Let me know; either way, good luck! xoxo