@-kareshidou- Honestly, now that I've finished reading it, I can say a couple of things about it.
Firstly, I'm awestruck at how many idioms and metaphors you've used in the story. The way you phrased the various themes and especially the rain and ground part of the story. That realization of being an empty shell part gave me chills because of how deeply it resonated with me
Secondly, I'm glad that you didn't shy away from portraying the flawed side of human nature and how you've still gone with a persuasive view to accept that negative side, the jealousy.
Thirdly, it made my heart ache at how you've slowly built the tipping tragedy and even pointed out the turning points that led to y/n’s fate. And in my opinion, it highlights the gut feeling that one gets in real life about something. Yeah, I'm totally mourning y/n here!
Lastly, I've not pieced the puzzle that was emphasized by Kisaki. I suppose it's the letter but I do wanna know if there are any other references or clues in the extras. I'm dying to know now.
Also, about the ending, I'm a sucker for angst when in the mood. To imagine about how the others felt after the tragedy, would definitely keep me on the edge of my seat but I've also come upon another interpretation for the ending. I think it's learning to cope with grief and regret especially for family and friends as well as giving a glimpse of how our loved ones still haunt us.
Even if I desire the first ending, I think the emotional message would be mulled over with that one.
This totally created a hole in my heart rn. So, congratulations on being a good writer!
