I really like your winx next gen but I feel like your story is moving to fast. You should read my story. I love it but I think it's too fast...I'm not gonna tell you how to do your story, but I could help you fix it too with the development of the story and the format...so if two people are talking it should be a separate line (like a paragraph)
For example:
"Hi I'm Sunshine!" She said.
"And I'm Daphne," Bloom's daughter.
And that's how your format should be. If you want to look at my stories of winx, go ahead and you can see the format and character development... They're called "Squadd Bunch."