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Happy Harry Potter Day!!! May 2nd of every year is celebrated as Harry Potter Day, as this is the day that the Battle of Hogwarts occurred. Let us remember the Fallen 50 and commemorate them today.
          	
          	Destructively,
          	Creative.

amiablyyy_

_mint_reyd_844

@amiablyyy_ Hello!! 
            I read your story. Here r some comments over the places u can improve:
            While it is quite easy to understand, there is no character development in the story. Let's thing about this logically. If Jessica were an owner of a MULTINATIONAL COMPANY which was built from scrap, might we add, then her character will be a bit more respectful. To build such a company would mean to have the thought of looking into what others think, if not all, yet certain aspects of it.  So, here we see her character failing. In the corporate world it is easy for a person to fail. And someone of Jessica's character would definitely fail.
            Then we have the grammar and vocabulary.
            Your grammar has many aspects in which it could improve. Then in the vocab, we have the word 'sawal' in one of the chapters, which you have translated as 'questioning'. There you could have used the word 'challenging' which would increase the efficiency of the sentence.
            Also, while focusing on the side characters, sometimes you lose focus on the main topic. People don't have a lot of time or patience to read stuff unrelated to the book. Even, we authors ourselves would sometimes feel bored reading it. So, try cutting it down and increase the frequency of the main topic. I get it that you are trying to include the main topic into the conversation but increase its volume because it's hard to search for a needle in a haystack.
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_mint_reyd_844

Hallllooooo...>!>>>!>>!!!>....!!
          I'm having something which causes anxiety.... Cancer!!! I was diagnosed with it just today!!    
          Just kidding.... I have ADHD .... again just kidding
          I'm having exams I'll post after March 15
          Anyways, I'm struck with something known as Plot Block. Like I can't get the scene right even though I know the next scene.
          I have ideas for a new Fred Weasley x Reader fanfic... What do u guys think??? Should I like start writing that too or should I complete this and then start writing the other one?
          Pllssss advise!!!!

_mint_reyd_844

Hi Everyone!
          I know it's been long since an update. But I promise, I will give you guys an epic meet. This chapter of doomed is <SPOILER ALERT> gonna be when Eva, Nico and Bianca finally meet Percy. So I wanna make it perfect and hence its taking time.
          Sorry for the delay,
          CREATIVELY DESTROYING TO FORM SOMETHING BEAUTIFUL