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ElysiaSkai

Hi, I just finished Mr Doctor and Mrs CEO. I’m sharing this as honest feedback because I think the story has a really strong and unique idea, but the execution of the characters and their emotional journey didn’t fully work for me.
          
          Gauri’s character is introduced as emotionally guarded because of her background, which is a strong foundation. But after her mother’s death, her shift into vulnerability felt too sudden. 
          
          A person with that level of emotional guarding would usually become more withdrawn or avoidant, not immediately open up to someone she has only recently met. The story doesn’t really show enough emotional safety or trust-building to justify that change, so it feels unearned.
          
          It also stood out to me that she is not even emotionally open with her husband, yet becomes vulnerable with the male lead quite quickly. That contrast makes the emotional progression feel inconsistent rather than developed.
          
          Aditya’s character had potential, but his “fixing” approach towards Gauri felt a bit one-dimensional. Instead of understanding her and respecting her boundaries, he often comes across as trying to solve her or change her, which takes away from her agency in the story.
          
          His emotional conclusions about her also feel too fast. They have only known each other for a short time, and there isn’t enough interaction shown to justify the level of emotional certainty he has about her. Because of that, the relationship progression feels rushed rather than naturally built. His persistence despite repeated dismissal also makes the dynamic feel uneven at times.
          
          Overall, the main issue for me is the pacing of emotional development and consistency in character behaviour. The idea is strong, but the emotional transitions between the characters don’t feel fully earned or grounded in enough development.

_siddh6581_

@ElysiaSkai i will surely look back at the book and edit it so that the story does not feel monotonous and feels smooth pacing .
            
            Your review means a lot to me and i am thankful to you for not only reading the book but also paying attention to the details .
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