@sizxox so I read it and it was really great, I liked the idea of it. The length of the chapter was good. The only thing you need to work on is detail. It just needs to be strung out more. Like when they kiss in the first chapter. Describe it! Take your time with it and don't worry if it's too long, because it won't be. And if you're not comfortable writing that kind of stuff, read other stories that explain it well. Besides the work you need to do on detail, it's great!