Your book is pretty well written. There are some grammatical errors but like o get no right to talk since mine is filled with grammatical errors. I think you should give your characters there own P. O. V. It can help give readers a glimpse into a characters mind. It can help show how that character is feeling. But that’s just a suggestion. I think your story is pretty good. Well,now if you’ll excuse me I’ve got o get ready for skool. Have a good day!