slayeva
Hey could you please check my book ' Attracted ' if you dont want it is ok, just tell me :)
Evana Xxx
aanimaa
DoodledeeAmy
Hey there,
Your story 'Always' is great. I'm loving the story!
Hopefully you keep writing such amazing books
nawwarrrr
Hi, could you check out my book? Thank you so much!
MemyselfandI2015
Hi ❤❤. Could you check out my book Edge of Destruction and perhaps vote? I'll do the same for.
MandyWinchester1
Hi there hun❤
Could you please check out my story The Elysium? Votes and comments would be great....thx and have a great day!❤
aanimaa
Guys check out my story,the first chapter actually. It's edited and a little more clear than it was before. Hope you like it.
Lots of love.
jim_ewu
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PeachRing_Princess
Hey. So i have a few questions for u if u dont mind answering them. Where are u from? Who is who. And what is happening in general. Your writing is smushed together and i am really confused and im only 1 1/2 chapters in.
PeachRing_Princess
Thats cool. I am fine with that but i think the main thing ur book needs help with is grammar. Most of ur sentences are incomplete. It's missing spaces all over the place. I can't keep anything straight because at the moment its a big paragraph screaming "help me!" So thats what ill try to do if u choose to accept it. U need to push enter in between perspectives. Ur paragraphs lack detail. And all in all it looks like an outline. Um. Also, ur chapters dont really lead up to much and because u have very little detail it moves too fast. Now i could feed you how u could write this book but if u dont want it i cant help. So take what u will. Its ur book. Hope u can find something useful in here. And if for whatever reason u want me to explain just let me know.
aanimaa
@Alias_Author the book is about suspense. Here the boy (Rad) sees a girl (Joyona) for the first time but he thinks she looks familiar and he wants to know her.more like he has crush on her. On the other hand, Joyona loves Rad. She has known him eversince ( I cannot tell you how). And zoe is Rad's friend whom he met when he came to New York and joe is Joyona's friend and Joyona came to New York because of joe. That is all I can tell you now. I know it's a little confusing but maybe as I uncover the suspense it'll be easy to understand.
PeachRing_Princess
I want to understand so i can try to help u as much as possible. Since u asked me to.
aanimaa
Hey there,
Thank you sooo much for your support and votes.I'll try to update more. Any constructive critisism is most welcomed.Keep reading and share it as well.
Lots of love
aanimaa
Hey there,
I have updated story. Check it out and feel free to give me feedbacks and do vote.
Lots of love
aanimaa
@gabbygarcia873 I hope you're enjoying it. Do vote and comment. Share it as well. It really means a lot to me.