aar_nalu

Good morning everyone! 
          	
          	I have published chapter five of my Shadows of the Crown after revising it so many times and taking a small break lol. Please check it out and do let me know if I missed on your stories while I was gone. I'm still catching up so I'm sorrry about that.
          	https://www.wattpad.com/1500252246-shadows-of-the-crown-chapter-five

jennasuits91

Awesome!! Can’t wait to check this out :)
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jennasuits91

Hi! This is a bit random, but I had a feedback question for you if you don't mind. I'm working on my rewrite and am trying to identify areas that are slowing down the plot. 
          
          Since you've already read my chapters 3/4/5, I was wondering if this sequence of chapters felt like it slowed the narrative down at all. (As a reminder - Ch 3 - the spooky forest/kelpie scene/meeting Patrick, Ch. 4 - Skeleton Grove with Patrick/Hook Tavern, and Ch. 5 - James Manor/running from the house pests)
          
          I'm curious which of these chapters you enjoyed most? Did the worldbuilding focus/all the description in three consecutive chapters make the story feel too slow--or did you still find these scenes fun and engaging for the most part?
          
          In order to speed up the plot and trim word count, I'm considering cutting chapters 3 and 4 in the next version and having the book bring Riley straight to James Manor. In this revision, the descriptions of Echo Forest and Skeleton Grove village would be sprinkled in later in the book as needed (and Riley would meet Patrick later). I've already cut the kelpie scene since it feels a bit more episodic in nature and certain plot points foreshadowed by that scene can be described more succinctly elsewhere. 
          
          I was just hoping to get some feedback on this from a few fellow writer-friends on here who've already read this segment. (No worries if you don't remember/don't have an opinion on it--just thought I'd ask)

jennasuits91

@aar_nalu This is great to know! Thank you so much for the honest feedback. I will probably end up doing this. I need to get the overall word count down from 120k to 100k if I want it to be competitive when I query the next version to agents--and the beginning is the slowest part because of all the upfront worldbuilding that is needed (by nature of the fact that it's a portal fantasy). So I want to primarily cut from the first dozen chapters or so. The murder mystery plot really picks up in the second half, which you'll probably notice once it's all up. My next version of the story will be very different because I'm taking the 'portal' nature of the story out and making it a standard fantasy.
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aar_nalu

@jennasuits91 I actually think that's a good idea! The pacing does feel a bit slow, so I think sprinkling it in later chapters would help. To be honest with you, the word count was high and inculded a lot of details that didn't really push the story along for me (granted your writing is still good, so it keep me engaged). I actually really liked chapter four (I'd go as far as to say it might be my favorite by far). The chapter had good pacing for me with action and it didn't seem long. On Wattpadd, I noticed a word count between 1500-2500 is a good amount to keep readers engaged. Readers seem to have a shorter attention span on here lol.
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aar_nalu

Good morning everyone! 
          
          I have published chapter five of my Shadows of the Crown after revising it so many times and taking a small break lol. Please check it out and do let me know if I missed on your stories while I was gone. I'm still catching up so I'm sorrry about that.
          https://www.wattpad.com/1500252246-shadows-of-the-crown-chapter-five

jennasuits91

Awesome!! Can’t wait to check this out :)
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