iHeartryuseisato
Giggles... heh.. so im only on chapter 5 :( and I lowk forgot the old version because you took so long grrr... but I can 100% see the difference and I do remember the old sane-oba interaction and I would fight anybody who said the old version was better, because the newer version is 1000% better. I didnt want to point it out but maybe you noticed it too.. the part where sanemi and y/n argued made me cringe in a way??? But its hard to describe but I like how you made it short and simple because we ALL know giyu would not spend more than 30 seconds talking to them..
iHeartryuseisato
@iHeartryuseisato ofc! No cuz I didnt wanna be rude and outright say "this is cringey" but then again a lot of stories I have read were corny and cheesy but this writing style you have it more mature FOR SURE. I also like how giyu is more realistic because we all know giyu would not "blush" or fall within 5 minutes of reading his part... but your doing great! It's so relatable too because I deleted so many stories because I could NOT continue with a whole different style knowing the last chapter was corny pick up lines and outright simping
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aeiryhmoon
Yess!! Thank you for pointing out the sane-oba part. It was so cringe, all the more… MY ENTIRE WRITING WAS REALLY CRINGE. Still iffy about it right now, but it’s still better. I couldn’t keep writing chapters knowing the ones before are so bad, so I just had to dedicate myself to editing everything. AND, I didn’t write in character at all. I’m writing Giyu better, Rengoku better, EVERYONE. Better. Thank you!!!
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iHeartryuseisato
@iHeartryuseisato the old part btw- when they argued. Not the new part ❤️❤️❤️
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