Hey (it's me again). So, I read your book and I really like it. I think it's really descriptive so the reader can imagine their surroundings in a lot of detail. However, (I hope this doesn't come out as mean or rude because that really isn't my intention!) I think your sentence structures need a little bit more work as well as your SPaG (spelling, punctuation and grammar). It didn't interfere much with your sentences, they made sense and are really good, but it's more that the random capitalisations and stray periods did mess up the flow a bit. If you'd like you can message me and I'll try to help you out in any way that I can; It's totally cool if you don't wanna though. (But I'd really like to have a writer friend to improve with!! (◍•ᴗ•◍)❤)
