@alipup57 I'd tell you... I don't want to sound mean. But.... Here I Go.
I've only read your Eeveelutions story, and my problems with it are:
Capitals. Yeah. Just remember to make it more detailed and things, readers will like it better.
Longer chapters. To do that, just do exactly what I said up there.
The plot's a bit confusing. I don't get what's going on, and who is who. Maybe a character page would help?