@amanda_lena
Alright, Chapters 1-4 of Flickering Candles have all been revised and are generally in better shape for now.
Next order of business: Write Chapters 5-8, and then revise those. Chapter 5 should be out by next week, if not sooner.
Revising Flickering Candles in my master Google Doc at the moment, expect a lot of chapter changes coming! (I'll post a full changelog once I've finished and published them once again).
Chapter 4 has been revised.
CHANGES:
- Overall, cut down from 5,016 words to 4,764 words. Too much exposition in certain areas.
- General scene changes, like cutting down on the Welcome Ceremony's lengthy and unnecessary word vomit.
Chapter 5 will be released soon!
Chapter 3 has been revised.
CHANGES:
- Due to removing the cliche ending of the previous chapter, I replaced everybody worrying to a scene of Kiara and Cecilia. Highly recommend giving it a read, considering it's important to Kiara and Gregory's character arcs.
- I added a day between the Grant announcement and Kiara being collected by Alexandria, considering I need to give the military time in the background. It'll make sense in Chapter 4's revised version.
- I changed some of Cecilia and Kiara's dialogue following the interview.
- Added exposition here and there, just for the sake of explanation.
Chapter 4 might as well come out tonight too, stay tuned for that.
Chapter 2 has been revised.
CHANGES:
- The title has gone from Tension to The Announcement.
- Explained a bit more about Nicholas Matthews, not too much but expositional details that'll come in handy later on.
- Added a few more expositional details about the photos used for Moira Revore and Kiara when they were announced, just to help the readers visualize the characters easier.
- The cliche "Main character passes out" ending was replaced by a Gregory and Kiara moment (I shed some tears writing it TBH, it just got to me).
Chapter 3 is coming, most likely tonight.