hey @angeldollar05 thx for the follow upp i hope that u would like my stories if u dont mind pll give it a try and do let me knw ur views and suggestions
cuteminger
I just got to looking at your story. You asked for pointers and so far I like it. Just make sure spelling and capitalization is good because it'll draw more people into it and will be an easier read. Also try breaking up the long paragraphs in each section with spacing every like 5 or so sentences as this will also help with reading. Hope that helped! But I do like the concept of the story itself.