animexfac

How do you talk to close ones about problems

animexfac

Im unpublishing some stories and stuff, just so i can organize my account a little- cuz rn everything is so messy, and then I'll maybeee publish at least a few chapters on this alice in borderladn x oc book I'm working on!

animexfac

Tell me, is this a good start on a book??
          (Totally not abandoning my other books)
          
          “Hana’s life was quiet and boring. She had always wished for a more eventful life. It was always the same routine everyday. Well, almost everyday, not counting the days she went on at very competitions.
          
          She had always wished that she would become a professional archer, but after becoming an author, that became hard. 
          She spent most of her time in her small office, writing books or painting, whatever she felt doing at that moment. But she wished it would be more to do. 
          
          She still had many dreams, even tho it would be hard to achieve them now. 
          Like one of them was to write a song. Considering she write books, she thought it would be easy, but it’s a lot harder than it looks. 
          
          Many has asked her why she chose being an author instead of… anything else?  
          She told them it’s because she can write her feelings into that book, or small story. 
          She struggles a lot with daily life and self confidence, and she makes her characters mostly like her so she can try to figure out how to stop her pain. But, it doesn’t seem to help. 
          
          The only thing she wished for was that she could think more positive, and look at herself in a positive way. Not the negative way she does now. 
          She also wished for someone to help her with her small insecurities to her big struggles. Someone to love her and help her in any way possible. 
          
          What she didn’t know is that she would find a certain doctor who was willing to help her.”
          
          It’s kinda long for a description for a book. 
          
          It mayyyyyy have some sensitive themes, but ywahhh ‍♀️‍♀️‍♀️
          
          
          (Maybeee a hint to the book??? I’ve started watching Alice in Borderland, and I’m obsessed with this one character)
          
          Nyahahaha (as Chota laughed in the first chapter of Alice in borderland(manga) ((ithink))

Bees_Reprise

@animexfac no problem, I’m glad I could help! I’m excited to read it :)
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animexfac

@ToOn_ice Thank you so much! I’ve been struggling to find out wether that was good or not, and tbh I feel like it’s a little too long myself, but thank you so much for you advice!!
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Bees_Reprise

@animexfac  a few critiques: a few spelling errors, but that not a big deal lol, and it is rather long for a desc. I would go for shorter and more intriguing, instead of giving so much away in the desc. Think of a blurb on the back of a book, you want the readers to be drawn in and wanting for more, so maybe make it shorter and sweeter, more mysterious, giving small hints about the story rather than large explanations of why the characters are who they are etc. Because then you can explore more when you get into the actual book, ykwim? It sounds good tough! I would personally just cut it down and make sure to check grammar and stuff :)) (sorry, idk if u wanted that much advice, I just thought I'd offer it )
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CoreTakada

Tyvm for the follow! Welcome to the Takaion clan! Some members like to call me dad but you can just call me Core if you feel more comfortable with that

CoreTakada

@animexfac :)))
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animexfac

@CoreTakada No problem!! And thank you for the warm welcome :))
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