Good with characters, descriptions. I`m not exactly sure about grammar and spelling because I use Microsoft word but they look good. Now in my personal opinion try to get the readers hooked very early on from either the prologue or the first 10 chapter because usually if it gets interesting later on people won`t find out because they already stopped reading, try the 3rd,4th, or 5th chapters to hook them but as long as its not past 10 its fine. Add a mysterious secret to some characters, don`t rush the story though. My sure you have that mix of reality and pinch of cliche fairy tale. This review was for 'What the hell I`m i doing here?'