@indig0jesse You know I took the time to make an alt account and write those things because I genuinely care about your work, right? You write with a lot of confidence, and it really shows in how naturally your prose flows and how engaging your story ideas are—especially the openings, which pull the reader in almost immediately.
What sometimes happens, though, is that after that strong start, the story doesn’t always keep the same depth and momentum. As it goes on, it can feel like most of the attention went into the beginning, while the rest—particularly the characters—could use more background and inner life to really stay with the reader.
I hope you know I wasn’t being harsh just for the sake of it. I said all of that because it honestly feels like a shame for this much talent to go to waste, and I really believe that with a bit more patience and development, your work could become something even stronger.
Also, happy belated birthday! I hope you had a great one. By the way, out of all your stories, which one do you personally like the most, and why?