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Guys go check out the new chapter of The Watch. Sorry it to me so long to update on it 
          
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The 7th chapter of The Watch is up
          
          Hope you guys like it. The good stuff is coming up real soon.
          
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Sorry guys about the false updates but I just noticed that all of chapter six wasn't published. So if you can read it and let me know if it's complete that would be great 

Hey guys I'm not going to be putting authors notes in my book so if you look here you will find one for each and every chapter of every book from now on.
          
          

Hey I love the first chapter of the watch please update soon

Hey guys go check out my new book  The Watch the next chapter will be here tomorrow I love you guysssss 
          
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Heyyyy guys I know y'all probably thought I had fallen of the map but I haven't. I just haven't updated "I Want More" in a while...But if you haven't noticed I have put it on hold. I'm debating if I should trash it or not. But don't worry I working on a new book that is coming out very soon. This book is much better then "I Want More" because this book I have thought all the way through. So keep a look out for it.
          
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Hey I'm personally thanking my followers because you liked my book enough to follow me and I really appreciate it. Because when I think I going to give up on the book you guys and girls show your love and support.  So XOXO
          
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went over the first chapter. it's a good base but needs some tweaking done to it. A bit of editing and some spelling corrections.  your main issue is the flow. you are making a lot of your sentences short and choppy when you could combine them and add a couple more words and it will flow like a dream. I know it seems like a lot of work and negativity but I'm not being negative at all. The most important thing is clarity on who is doing what and how well it flows together. This should help you get started. If you want me to do more then let me know I would be glad to help.