Haru Usagie

Hey, I'm a new writer. Can you please check out my story and give me a feedback of what you think?
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/324519911?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=_Winter__Flower_&wp_originator=dO%2BaLUq5p9ynSuw5ITle0JDLnU2d%2F%2Bk0%2BafOLfrIfSWRYqhEpNaL1hCw36kwWArjU%2BPcZanr67fvkUxlNbCrpATSKjC9xHwWD2Fwc7CfN3plpp1sjT%2FIfDvVIMY%2BYQFU