@Pinkyswear010 HELLO AGAIN! >< suggest lang ako beh, since nakita ko chapter 4 ba yun or 5,nakalimutan ko. Open ka for suggestions, so meron akong suggestions. Try to lessen the use of emojis? Kung gagamit ka ng emoji to make the emotions of aiden more visible, try to use emojis like this(>< , ⁽⁽٩(๑˃̶͈̀ ᗨ ˂̶͈́)۶⁾⁾,ꈍ◡ꈍ, :(, <3)
Tapos kung pwede, since may halo syang fantasy, try to focus on making it more realistic, for us readers to visualize the scene. Tapos when it comes to magic, pwede, depende sayo, kung pwedeng palitan yung "magic" na word with "mahika" or something not too direct sa word na magic? More on unique words to symbolize magic.
Yun lang! HAVE A GREAT DAY AND WAITING FOR ANOTHER UPDATE<3
