Hi!
I just checked out your Yuri Plisetsky story. Let me just start by saying that I really like the way you write, and despite what you said about your English, you have an excellent grammar!
I really liked how you're getting into the character, describing her as well her thoughts and main problems. However, I noticed you start the story with a bit of a delicate situation, which is suicide. It's fine for you to write of it, but I suggest you place a warning in your disclaimer chapter since some people could be offended or triggered, and that wouldn't be nice.
But again, your way of writing is close to flawless and I encourage you to continue your story!! Congrats!
--Emily Falkenrath