authornaivi

Chapter 1 is updated on wattpad 
          	This is rewritten chapter. 
          	
          	If you see the old chapter tha reinstall the app

iamnairasinghania

I genuinely LOVE this book—like, obsessively.  That's exactly why I'm so invested in the rewrite.
          The biggest thing I'd say is that your story has always been strong, but the writing at the beginning didn't fully do justice to it. The plot was interesting enough to keep me reading, but the way it was presented felt rushed. The opening chapters were very short, scenes ended almost as soon as they began, and the narration didn't yet have the same personality that it develops later in the book.
          For me, the biggest difference between good writing and a good story with average writing is this:
          A good story tells me what happened.
          Good writing makes me feel like I'm living it.
          For example—
          Instead of:
          "He walked into the room. Everyone stared. He ignored them and sat down."
          An engaging version would slow the moment down. It would let us notice the silence, the expressions, the tension in the room, maybe his thoughts or sarcasm, someone's whispered comment, the way the chair scraped against the floor. Nothing major has changed in the plot, but the reader experiences the scene instead of just receiving information.
          Another thing is voice.
          Some books have very simple plots, but the narration itself is entertaining. The character's internal monologue has humor, opinions, dramatic reactions, random observations, witty comparisons—so even if they're literally walking down a hallway, you're still entertained.
          That's something I think authors like Ana Huang and Rina Kent do really well. Whether people like their books or not, they establish a very clear narrative voice almost immediately. You can usually tell whose POV you're reading because every character thinks and reacts differently.
          Freida McFadden is another great example. Her prose isn't overly descriptive or flowery, but every chapter gives you a reason to continue. She ends scenes with unanswered questions, uncomfortable realizations, or tiny twists that make "just one more chapter" impossible.

authornaivi

@iamnairasinghania ohhh good. Thank you so much for writing this. I really wanted someone to actually tell me what my book was lacking because I can't be the only one to feel it. But there is actually someone like me who felt the same. Thank you so much for explaining everything. I am working on writing the chapters more descriptive and longer and letting the scence build rather than ending it in the same chapter. Ik it will take time but at least it will get more engaging and the potential of the book won't be wasted because of my bad writing. Love u for this beautiful note <33
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iamnairasinghania

Even a lot of Indian Wattpad authors—writers like weirdpranialive_, Avinaphile, AeraWritess, Authorrayaa, anshiik2, sinsbyaarani, Sublime_writes, aeiinks, whentheinkedtangled, or similar creators—often succeed because the narration feels conversational, emotionally expressive, and immediately engaging. Readers become attached to the voice before the plot has even fully unfolded.
            Besides having a swoon-worthy and gripped up plot and character arcs, their narration feels like someone is talking to you. There are funny observations, relatable thoughts, awkward interactions, emotional pauses, playful banter, callbacks, running jokes, and enough personality that readers become attached before the main plot even begins.
            I also think your scenes could breathe more. Sometimes a scene would start, deliver the information, and end. Instead, let conversations wander a little. Let characters interrupt each other, tease each other, notice random things, hesitate before answering, misunderstand each other, or simply exist together. Those little moments often become readers' favourite parts because they make the characters feel real rather than like they're only there to move the plot forward.
            Another difference is showing vs. reporting. Rather than telling us someone is angry, nervous, or attracted, let us notice it through their behaviour, dialogue, body language, pacing, or thoughts. Readers love piecing emotions together themselves.
            Overall, I hope the rewrite keeps the story as untouched as possible while only focusing on the delivery. I think it needs to slow down, let scenes unfold naturally, trust the characters to carry moments, and let your narration have the same confidence and personality that it already has later in the book. Because once I got further into the story, I could genuinely feel your writing becoming stronger—and that's why I think the rewrite has so much potential.
            
            ~Sorry for writing a whole Mahabharat.  I'm cursed with overanalysing books I love.
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Xanthium200619

Author even I faced the same issue and none of ur works is visible..it would be better if atleast you inform us wheather u have some issue .cause leaving a story at the middle especially when we r so much into the plot...it's really disheartening!!

bluberrypies_dz

I just started reading "Dark Devotion" tonight and made it to Chapter 5. I was so excited to find out whether Dev would finally meet his childhood sweetheart in the next part of the story.
          
          But all of a sudden, it showed that the story had been deleted by the author. At first, I thought it was just a network issue, so I checked my DNS settings and tried opening it again, but it still showed the same message. I even connected to a VPN and tried again, but nothing changed.
          
          Then I visited your Wattpad profile. On the homepage, it says you have 3 works, but none of them are visible.
          
          I'm really confused. Did you actually delete Dark Devotion, or did something happen on Wattpad that caused your stories to disappear?
          
          Honestly, I was really looking forward to reading it till the end, especially since it was available for free.
          
          This has genuinely made me so frustrated and anxious.
          
          Also, I wanted to ask about your Instagram. Your Insta ID isn't visible, and the stck link in your bio doesn't seem to be working either. Could you please let me know your correct Instagram ID or the link to your YouTube bio?

inkednightsky

Hello author you had a book with the character ruthvik, later named samarth who lost his memory and forgot the girl he loved and married her sister Ishita. It was my favourite book also the book from which I discovered you. What happened to that book and where is it now. I really miss that story. *watery puppy eyes"

inkednightsky

@inkednightsky so you will not be writing that book, maybe after dark devotion?? It was one of my favourite books.
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authornaivi

@inkednightsky you are talking about Kanika. Sorry but that book was deleted by wattpad
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