Hey!
Im Kaitlyn A.K.A the one who fanned you:)
OMG!! Call the police! He totally stole my heart! I really liked that story. But one thing-you dont have to listen to my suggestion- Maybe change the title to something else? More people will probaly read it -i think- because if the title sounds more interesting like "It's like monopoly, But physical" That was part of the story and it sounds pretty cool.
Just a suggestion! You dont have to change it at all!
-Kaitlyn:)
Maybe you can even change it to "Love At first Sight" Or Princeton !
(I'm not saying that your title isn;t interesting btw!:))
-Kaitlyn Again :))