babymun

Press the link... go on....press it 
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ZAaali

Please have a look at my novel,
          Mafia king as my escort.
          just a little peep
          
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babymun

Hi,
            Feel free to tell me that I can go to h e double hockey stick I wanted to give you personal feedback on the book seperately. 
            I love the plot! I think you have cool characters and setting, as well as perfectly atypical interactions to make your novel stand out. 
            The only area of improvement (in my humble and totally dismissable opinion) is depth. The characters themselves can unfold within your story with a bit more "show" vs "tell"
            I love everything else about it, and best of luck in your endeavors. 
            
            Cheers,
            Caia
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