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          	https://www.wattpad.com/story/286910719

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kemorgan65

Hi @badbiaxh0
          Thanks for the follow! Feel free to check out any of my works. Don't hesitate to comment or ask questions, I'd love to hear what you think of them! :-)

bambino_0

@kemorgan65 thanks. This will really help me out. 
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kemorgan65

@badbiaxh0 I took a peek at your description and first chapter. You seem to have an interesting premise/storyline, but it's not my kind of read, nor do I have much time to read so I'm very specific about what I choose to read. Anyway, from first glance, you need to start by correcting grammatical errors including capitalization and punctuation.  I suggest you use Grammarly to at least address that area of your writing.
            
            Then, as you're just beginning, there are many guides out there. The Editor's Blog has a lot of great advice you can browse through or search for specific writing topics. I'll share some links to get you started.
            
            https://www.grammarly.com/blog/comma/ 
            https://blog.wordvice.com/when-to-use-commas-colons-semicolons-and-dashes/
            
            http://theeditorsblog.net/2010/12/08/punctuation-in-dialogue/
            https://www.scribophile.com/academy/he-said-she-said-dialog-tags-and-using-them-effectively
            http://theeditorsblog.net/2012/02/28/inner-dialogue-writing-character-thoughts/
            
            http://theeditorsblog.net/2016/11/28/the-perspective-from-inside-a-character/
            http://theeditorsblog.net/2011/05/13/viewpoint-character-and-the-need-to-choose-wisely/
            http://theeditorsblog.net/2012/07/26/point-of-view-part-two/
            http://theeditorsblog.net/2012/07/26/point-of-view-part-three/
            
            https://blog.reedsy.com/live/show-dont-tell-rule-reason
             http://www.writersdigest.com/editor-blogs/guide-to-literary-agents/another-take-on-show-dont-tell-for-writers
            http://theeditorsblog.net/2013/10/11/set-story-into-motion-use-meaningful-verbs/
            
            https://www.helpingwritersbecomeauthors.com/common-writing-mistakes-pt-54/
            http://blog.bookbaby.com/2018/11/lyrics-in-books-your-questions-answered/
            https://www.archwaypublishing.com/Resources/Editing-and-Design/The-Different-Types-of-Editing.aspx
            https://theeditorsblog.net/2011/06/07/checklist-for-editors/
            http://terribleminds.com/ramble/2013/09/10/25-steps-to-edit-the-unmerciful-suck-out-of-your-story/
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