@banta101 I already read through and it's a nice write-up with the action and all but don't you think your prologue will leave your readers more confused than eager for the next chapter. For instance, the duel upon duel upon duel, makes for a prolonged Dilly-Dally, but that's just how I see it. Plus you happen to mention the name of the person who was having the nightmare at the end of the chapter and then stopped it abruptly, it doesn't make for a nice cliffhanger, only confusion. Anyway, everything I said is just an opinion, I don't want you to do anything that you don't feel like doing but I think it'll be best if you go through your write-up again, maybe inspiration will strike and you'll find a better way of projecting your story to the world
