Rebecca

u know wht my name is Rebecca too lol
          

@imyage417 After i've finished 'Vampire Price, Earn My Respect!!!'  :) 

Uh shower seen, yup it's a must. 

Just wanted to let you know that, I gave been reading your book and I absolutely love it! Keep up the great work!! :D

I love ur book its really good! :)

@TommarowIsToday Oh my god thank-you sooo much thats the most posotive comment ive ever had :D :)

@littleshawtti95 thanxx and yeahh that would be seriously awsome, i try to edit but im rubbish and it :( 

A friendly advice...
          hey..good day to you..as i was reading your story i notice that its like your telling a story.i mean you could do it better if your going to let your leading character be the one who tells the story...well i may not a writer like you but i have read a lot of stories and notice some of the writers styles and its nicer to read if the main character was the one telling the flow of the story of whats happening and how they feels, how they think act and talk..hope you get my point...

I agree with the person under me :) 

Ok, I really want you to do good on our story, so I'm going to give you some tips. Always define where one sentence ends and another begins, 'cause I noticed that you forgot sometimes. If you don't it becomes one big run-on and it can get detracting.
          Second, every time a new person speaks, start a new paragraph. It makes your story longer, you look more professional, and the information doesn't become confusing.
          Your really good, and have a great imagination. That will get you far in the writing business. Keep up the good work!! I see great potential!