bibliophile2347

@aishalam 
          	
          	Your story is original and it's characters genuine. My only advice is to perhaps proofread a little more (mainly spelling, your grammar and syntax are quite legible unlike many Wattpad stories I have seen). You could perhaps also indicate x years earlier when you speak of the original bracelet wearers for the sake of clarity (unless, of course, it is happening simultaneously with the present plot in an alternate universe. Also acceptable, but again clarify this for the reader). Furthermore, I approve of the fact that you are a Merlin fan. :p Best of luck, and keep writing! :)

Alfaaz_

Thank u sooo much for taking the time to read it and for your advice! I'll definitely look into it :) I didn't even realize that the time period of the original bracelet owners was unclear thank you for pointing it out :) 
          	  Hahahaha I actually stumbled upon Merlin accidentally but have been in love ever since! 
          	  Thank you so much again! It really means a lot :)
          	  ~Qandeel
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addicted2dragons

Hey! Thank you so much for voting on Talon the Black! It means a lot to me :) hope you are enjoying the story!!

addicted2dragons

Thank you!! And yes, I really struggle with homonyms. I always know how they are supposed to be spelled, but then I get so wrapped up in the story I end up not even thinking about it. I've had so many readers point out those misspellings. I definitely need to go back and fix them. I'm really happy you are enjoying it :)
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bibliophile2347

@Addicted2Dragons Very much so (I may have read 30-35 chapters total in a day). My only suggestion is spell-checking for homonyms (ex. nock should be knock...this specific one is fairly common. Others include waste=waist). Oftentimes conventional spell-checkers like Microsoft Word don't pick up on homonyms as incorrect (silly Word). Overall though, action-packed, wonderfully saucy heroine, intriguing villain...keep up the good work! :)
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