bloiwrites18

Updated. 
          	I just published "Chapter-26" of my story " PIYA: His Destiny  ". https://www.wattpad.com/1623036211?utm_source=android&utm_medium=profile&utm_content=share_published&wp_page=create_on_publish&wp_uname=bloiwrites18

GhatakBatak

Hey, author
          I was reading piya, and I thought I should give you a suggestion. 
          You might wanna change the description, because that made me hesitate before reading the story. 
          The description is all about how nikhil is a villain........ 
          You didn't write about piya and ekansh moments- the lead couple. 
          I was so confused, I thought it was a cheating story
          I'm so glad I gave it a shot, though. I love the story. 
          But yeah, add a few ml-fl moments, piya and nikhil can wait. 
          And also, the description should be about the STORYLINE, and there is nothing in the description which tells anything about the story. And most people don't read tags. 
          
          I hope you would consider these suggestions so that more people may read this story. It's amazing. ♥♥

bloiwrites18

Hy by the way I updated chapter 31.
            
            https://www.wattpad.com/story/395344091?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=bloiwrites18
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bloiwrites18

@GhatakBatak Thanks for the suggestion, i also feel the same, i am just a little confused how to write the description.
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GhatakBatak

You can write like this maybe 
            1) add a few dialogues that are in the book. For eg, one dialogue of ekansh insulting piya; another of him asking forgiveness. Or just the insult one. Make it like you're giving us a glimpse of 1/2 scenes in the book. 
            2) then you can give a character sketch of ekansh and piya. 
            3) then what happens in their story, but with a 'open ended question format' 
            will the dust clear the gold's mind, or will it fade away in the gold's shine........... idk, something like that. Mujhe nhi aata. (⁠^⁠^⁠)
            4) you can also give a hint about the "past resurfacing" and the impending danger, rashi and nikhil. 
            Will they survive it or will it leave them ruined......... Again, aisa hi koi filmy line. 
            5) do mention somewhere that yeh story 1980s mein based hai
            6) and please use your 'dust' and 'gold' analogy once in that. It's amazing.
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shi_dreams

Hi author 
          
          Please try my book.
          
          "It has been eleven years, Kunwar Sa.
          I remain here... waiting, longing, trapped between hope and time.
          
          Every morning, my eyes still wander toward those doors, praying for your return.
          
          For all these years, I have carried a love for you within my heart - a love I never even had the chance to confess.
          
          I am broken in more ways than one, yet every day I try to become someone worthy of you... someone worthy of the promise you once gave me.
          
          So I beseech you, Kunwar Sa... return to me.
          
          Not for the sake of my longing heart, but for the sacred vow you once placed upon it - a vow I have guarded more faithfully than my own life."
          
          - Your Samiya
          
          A young Kunwarani Sa spends eleven long years waiting for her Kunwar Sa - the man who left behind nothing but a promise and a longing that refused to fade.
          
          Even as her heart aches for his return, she continues to rule and protect the kingdom in his absence, silently carrying both the burden of the crown and the pain of love.
          
          But time changes people.
          And promises are not always spared by fate.
          
          Will Samiya finally reunite with her Kunwar Sa after all these years?
          And if she does... will he still be the man she devoted her heart to, or has destiny changed him for something - or someone - else?
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/411197587?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=shi_dreams