Your story is really good.
I jsut think that maybe you should make a better title? to grab in the readers more... LOL
If you want, when we go on at the same time we could chat about making a better cover and title? I could help you or just do that for you.
orr Just tell me your email or I private message you.
Just remember to like give me a summary cuz im helping a bunch of people.
Post me on my Message board to tell me