Okay, so I have a couple things to say, 1) thanks for the follow 2)I'm not trying to judge or bring rude, but I'm gonna give you some feedback on the , "pregnant and 16", story you are writing. So first off I would like to say it's really good so far but when you're writing somthing that someone says it's best if you put it in quotes just so that your readers know when they are talking and when they are thinking. Second, your story has a few holes in the plot. So when you are stating a new scene, you've got to describe it in a bit more detail, just to fill those holes up. And lastly, when you start writing out a scene make sure you write out the entire thing before changing it completely. If you want to see what I mean read my story, "singing for you." Also another thing if you are having a hard time with the writing, write out the story on paper first and then type it up. It's a lot easier that way or you can think of the entire story and make every chapter for it and then type what you want on that chapter section.
