Hiiii sorry for responding months late but here’s my reply, ( i wont sugar coat ), ok so i started and it was good like it had me hooked but idk stuff is missing and idk what it is like I can’t put my finger on it, but as u said there’s definitely lots of grammar mistakes/errors, though it wasn’t hard to read, i did get to a point where I wasn’t hooked to it anymore, i do think you need to work on writing better ( that sounds so mean i am so sorry), I haven’t read a good book in a while and this is the closest I’ve gotten but a little recommendation, you can go read other books and take notes on details like spot out things you might have missed and haven’t put in your book. You have a LOT of potential and i have high hopes you could get lots of views and reads throughout time, i hope your writing journey works out and balances throughout time. Love you and keep going!
