So far I've only read The Alluring, and I have to say: I think it's coming up nicely so far. I don't have much to say about this book because it's only two chapters long and nothing very important is going on at the moment. Though I have some words for it. We're talking about the girl, the protagonist of the book. I haven't quite catched her name? Or I was not paying enougj attention? I said I liked the book (which is absolutely true) but you need to define your character more, introduce us to her personality more. Her hobbies, her behaviour, basically anything that gives more information about her. Now, I understand this story is only at its beginning, but I'd like to see more of her personality, her opinions being written about. This may be only my personal prefference, but it's the opinion of one of your readers. And about that part where her best friend says "yo biatch". Don't get me wrong, I'm not triggered or anything, it's just the way you spelled the words that bug me. I understand what effect you were going for but for a book to have a professional look (and I assume this is what you're going for) you'll have to spell them properly. Like "Yo, bitch," or you could change the "yo" part to "hey" and achieve that neat look. Please don't get mad over anything, this is just my opinion in the form of constructive criticism :) I'll try to ead your other book tomorrow, after school and I'll keep you updated with my opinion if you want :) Have a good day! (Or night, times zones :( )
