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The story overall is amazing. A few thing to think about is maybe a signifier for who's POV it is and when you write to keep the capitalization consistent in chapter 1 with the razorfins and in chapter 4 with shardlings also try not to start sentences with 'and' like "and that's not mentioning the ones who are.." in chapter 3. in chapter 5 the paragraph that start with "it's no secret" has a quotation error. Overall it's coming along great and is an amazing story so far!!

booksgivemelife444

Thank you so much!! This has been really helpful. I’ve tried to get a few family members to read it, but they’re just like “yeah it’s really good,” and while that’s nice to hear it doesn’t actually help me. So thank you! Have a good day/night 
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Hands_Off_My_Pages

Hiiiii! How's your summer going?

booksgivemelife444

No you’re totally good lol. Thank you. Mine’s been a bit boring too 
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Hands_Off_My_Pages

Omg, i did not see this! Im so sorry! But my summer has been going ok just kind of boring and im sorry about your phone!
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booksgivemelife444

Pretty good! I dropped my phone in a lake though which is why I haven’t been reading your fic. (That sounds fake but it’s 100% true) how’s yours?
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Hands_Off_My_Pages

hello!!

booksgivemelife444

Aww thank you that means so much. And yes, I’m doing okay now because it’s summerrrr. So does that mean you’re a freshman now orrr? How are you doing?
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Hands_Off_My_Pages

Also it’s ok just wanted to check up on you
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Hands_Off_My_Pages

@booksgivemelife444 Yeppp It’s really good and I had just graduated and wanted to finish it
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Hands_Off_My_Pages

hiiii

Hands_Off_My_Pages

Its all good! i hope you get some time to relax soon though!!
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booksgivemelife444

I am!! Just unfortunately busy  I’m planning to read your fic soon though I promise I still want to 
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Hands_Off_My_Pages

Oh that’s sucksss! Hope ur okay though
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Hands_Off_My_Pages

Hiii
          

Hands_Off_My_Pages

@booksgivemelife444 its totally fine! Just happy ur okay
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booksgivemelife444

I’m glad it helped! And thanks for checking in. (Sorry I haven’t gotten around to read your newest chapter, I’m thinking maybe this weekend?? Or maybe I can do it tomorrow.)
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Hands_Off_My_Pages

Hiii

booksgivemelife444

@Hands_Off_My_Pages thank you. it's really nice of you to check in. i'm sorry i'm behind on your fic, hopefully i have time to read it soon because i want to.
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Hands_Off_My_Pages

@booksgivemelife444 That’s completely fair. I’m really glad you’re okay though  Hope things ease up for you soon, you deserve some peaceful reading time.
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booksgivemelife444

Oh that’s sweet. I’m okay, just got a little bit of stuff going on right now. I haven’t had as much time to read which kinda sucks. 
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