@NaZSh98 while reading your story, I appreciated what you were trying to do and it does make sense. I'd definitely keep reading it, but the only critics I have for you is your spelling mistakes and punctuation errors. Of course you don't need to change and edit it if you don't want to, but I'm just saying it because errors are something I loathe.. Any who, in summary, your story is actually very good, it just needs to be a bit more detailed and maybe even a bit longer within the chapters, if you want to make it longer and more detailed. Hope this helps