hi! i just finished reading your story "dear mr. billionaire" the second time and i truly appreciated it just like when i did the first time. you must have more than one tickle or funny bone in your skeletal system. i found your story amusing, interesting, especially the bickerings between the twins, their sort of "cheating," their covering up for each other, and other naughty antics only sibblings would do, thru their school days other in their homeworks which is very "normal" among sibblings. i found most of the dialogues you created very down to earth and realistic. perhaps, you also experienced such situations with your sibblings and parents to have been able to write it in your story.
and i found another attractive and interesting aspect in the story, you did include bedroom scenes but very, very unusual and funny, but not in anyway, would be classified as pornographic. i am not a prude but i still believe that writers should not include such scenes to attract readers. it's the storyline that is more important so that the readers could get the message the writer wants to convey.
as i've written before to other writers of stories i've read in wattpad, everyone can write not not every writer has the talent to write. i hope you continue writing similar stories since it brought in me good entertainment. you mentioned that you really liked to write. continue to do so. in addition, i think that you really took great pains in presenting a story free of grammatical errors. great job!
