I like Claimed, but I assume this is still a rough draft? I would love it if you would do a complete rewrite of it, I just think you could do this so much better. The relationships and different characters are kind of confusing? Some more background information, more information about their world, would help a lot. Are they all werewolves? More description and a greater level of detail, more information about who the characters are and how they relate to each other and maybe add greater depth to the characters personalities. Some of the characters just seem to drop in and out of the story without a lot of explanation? The whole story is interesting so far, but I’m sure it’ll be even more interesting the second time around. Read your story out loud after writing it and maybe outline it a bit, I think it’ll help you to lessen a lot of the confusion. I’m going to finish reading what you’ve got so far, but I’ll look forward to reading it the second time around.
