Hi um I just wanted to ask, if maybe in your next chapter you could try taking your time? Like rereading what you wrote, even asking someone else to proofread it. I think that it could really help with your readers being able to understand what they're reading. If you don't have some one that can proof read your writings, I would be more than willing to volunteer. If you would like to get to know me more, I'm almost always on here, so just msg me. This is solely meant for helping you be a better writer, but if more comes of it, you might make a new friend.
